Newfoundland and Labrador
I like trains.
Nikola Tesla, Rockstar Scientist
I think the opening can be made more interesting simply by reversing the order of the first four paragraphs.
Naturally, a few tweaks may be needed for it flow properly in the new order.
At last! Thought Scenton Anoma The final core is complete.
The glow of the Core shone upon their face shields...
They were the Scenton Alliance and...
Now, within the vast realms of our universe, ...
Just my two cents. Do with it as you will.
Disclaimer: I am not a writer.